Firebird(and others)


#1

Before I came here nearly a year ago, I began writing this, didnt go back to it until months after that
I enjoy everyone’s lyrics in our family and thought while reading a few on here that maybe it was time i showed my one first real attempt at something lyrical. I was thinking of fort minor’s believe me as I wrote so some idea came from there.and also these:

phoenix

anyway feel free to comment/give feedback on it,

Firebird-
Think about who we were
on the same road like a firebird
Felt like we had it made, finish line flyin our way
We were gonna get there, get to paradise
Whoda thought none of that would suffice

whyd you do me wrong
Part the fault’s my own cause hell I saw it all along
That warning flashed in my face
Shoulda known we couldn’t finish this race

Cause you couldn’t see couldn’t realize
whyd you take it for granted, that was our demise
had what all them fuckers want but never see
Whyd they steer you down this road without me?

Look at what there was
Look at what there aint no more
That firebird popped a wheel blew a gasket no more pedal to the floor
All that’s left are fumes, memories of roads long gone
All that’s left is us rusting from the toxic lyrics in this song

they can flash quarter miles n burn rubber
But show me one whos a true lover
I hear you say theyre free they don’t go through strife
But we we coulda finished that race the grand tour we call life

Don’t forget though you knew me well
Im a down and dirty mother fucker cant you tell
pops taught me not to throw the towel
said don’t go down that alley, boy you gotta rally
You don’t just crush the scrap, avoid the trap
Add new sparks straighten that chassis polish that body
Get your hands dirty bring that shit back to glory

But Look at us now
Look at what there aint no more
That firebird popped a wheel blew a gasket no more pedal to the floor
All that’s left are fumes, memories of roads long gone
All that’s left is us rusting from the toxic lyrics in this song

fuck that’s the problem that’s my pain
Its in my nature to fix, to wipe away the rain
Yet you left that firebird stranded and abandoned, left to rust on an old backroad
You left it choking, dying on its own fumes
now whos to say what you do or don’t deserve
Do I get down to it, rise it from the ashes
or do I let it go let it rot in its own ruins

All that’s left are fumes, memories of roads long gone
All that’s left is us rusting from the toxic lyrics in this song


#2

This! :muscle: :heartpulse:

Your first lyric is really good! :open_mouth: :star_struck: I like that comparison between life and the “phoenix”… and yeah we could rise from the ashes! :muscle: keep it up! :smile:

The phoenix’s pictures are really beatiful!the one on the car is awesome! :star_struck: :star_struck:


#3

I could actually picture this song in a Fast and Furious film


#4

Nice to see you sharing your work as well, good stuff!


#5

Wow i love the pic of the car. And the song is so great too.


#6

I really enjoyed your lyrics. They flowed well and have a good meaning to them. The photos go well with them :heartpulse:.


#7

Well, instead of making another thread I figured I’d just share similar stuff on here,
I had just the first part written in a notebook from scribbling during a calculus class about a year and half ago lol
I was reading through it last week and imagined you could come up with something awesome @acemasters Haha idk why I thought the word play wth “one last call” was cool :man_shrugging:
Anyway, I kept going on it yesterday and came up with this, I can see why Mike threw himself at writing-it’s therapeutic haha

Last Call
Been sitting in this bar for far too long
B****in over why you’re gone
But the keep is closing shop
And I’m about done, just about ready to stop

Checking on my watch, there’s still time to spare
So one last call raise’m up in the air!
What brought me here just ain’t gone yet
So let it all out before the lines are spent
One last time I wanna hear you roar
F the tears f the pain just say no more!

Shit this buzz has got me impaired
Why am I dialing when I know I’m scared
Too bad clock is ticking,phone is beeping
Hello? Who’s this? BS you already know
Called to make sure you never forget
I’ll be out on top you’ll see filled with regret

Checking my watch, damn the time is here
Bartender yelling last call and I’m still there
Oh well, lift’em up in the air!
What brought me here is gone, lights out
One last time I wanna hear you roar
F the tears f the pain just say no more!

Whaddya know, walking out that door
But just one look and I’m hitting the floor
Five minutes in and I’ve got her number
This girl’s different, I’m already starting to wonder
One last call and maybe I’ll be done
One last call, my future’s just begun


#8

Started messing around again today while at the park,
Funny how current tone and emotions transfer into what you choose to write

Rebirth

Past mistakes
Past experiences
Past decisions
Weighing me down
Holding me back
It’s about time to let go
Tried so much but now I know

All i needed was a reason
All I needed was the catalyst
To show me what’s my worth
All i needed was a reason
All I needed was the catalyst
To fight for my rebirth

Future choices
Future experiences
Future decisions
Building me up
Leading me on
All you do with a simple hello
It’s about time that you know

All i needed was a reason
All I needed was the catalyst
To show me what’s my worth
All i needed was a reason
All I needed was the catalyst
To fight for my rebirth

So for the first time since forever
I’m seeing clearer weather
I owe it all to you
Know it’s true, I’m now reborn
Long overdue, I’m my best form
All i needed was a reason
All I needed was the catalyst
To fight for my rebirth


#9

Nice lyrics! Keep it up cause you’re good at it and yeah it’s therapeutic as well! :wink: :sun_with_face:


#10

Thank you :slight_smile: nowhere near @StephLP18 or ace or anyone else haha


#11

They write much, you’re at a beginner level maybe but reeeeally good! :smile: :sun_with_face:


#12

It’s really good I like @framos1792


#13

@framos1792 Last Call is far superiour then anything i have ever written

It was amazing, the wording and the flow, the way it all links together
Perfection wouldn’t cover it

Never put yourself down saying your work isn’t as good as someone elses

You might feel that, but others may think other wise

I would instead say its different to someone elses style of writing!


#14

I just read Mike and I started to Rap like him (no like him, but a kind of weird rap lol) and it has its own flow. Amazing lyrics! When do you come to Brazil Guatemala with your first EP?

About Rebirth:

I see this as a bridge, nice way of start a song :sunglasses:

Keep working in it amigo, you have an amazing vision for this!

This! Great advice @acemasters


#15

Aww shucks guys, that’s way bigger compliments than I could’ve imagined :sweat_smile: thank you!

Heck no,
I’ve said before I love what you come up with on a consistent basis :slight_smile:

And @IronSoldier16 I’ll definitely be there for our collaboration work with onirics! :stuck_out_tongue_winking_eye:


#16

You already have my number, just text me and we set a date :wink: Can’t wait for another song (Don’t feel pressure by me jaja)


#17

@framos1792 lets agree to disagree :joy::joy::joy::joy:


#18

Don’t ever say that your not as good as me or ace @framos1792 because last call I am in love with that song. So never let your self down
Because your great